Describe a custom from your country
that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice,
using specific reasons and examples.
Korea
has lots of special traditions, and we Koreans have thought that relationship between
people is very important. On the other hand, Korea has developed its own unique
cuisine, and a popular food among them is the rice cake. Rice cakes are proven
to be good for health, and they become such great snacks. If we combine the
tradition of valuing relationships and love towards the rice cakes, another
great custom comes out. People in Korea, traditionally, gave out rice cakes,
called siru, to their new neighbors when they moved to a new area. This
promotes a better and friendlier relationship between neighbors, and therefore
should be adopted from other countries as well. These are the following
reasons.
To
begin with, sharing rice cakes with new neighbors can promote the relationship
and become more familiar to each other. These days, most people live by
themselves. They all prefer individualism and so they do not communicate with
people around them. Some even do not know who are living in the door right next.
In this world, people should live together, cooperating and considering about
each other. By passing the rice cakes, it does not only mean giving out, but
also serves as a sign to know each other and to get closer as neighbors. Once,
I was really distracted by the noises from the upper floor. They had just moved
in and were quite understandable, but still I was annoyed. However, the next
day, they brought a box of siru cakes. It was my first time getting that kind
of gift from a neighbor, so I was astonished and thankful at the same time.
Until now, we two homes maintain a very good relationship with each other. The
rice cakes connected us. The power of sharing rice cakes will also be shown
effectively in other countries as well.
Moreover,
the custom of sharing rice cakes can be easily adopted to other countries and
change in the way that each country prefers. Rice cakes are Korean traditional
food. Since the food shared does not have to be siru cake, other countries’ can
use their won traditional food. This can also be a way to preserve the culture
as well. While sharing the rice cake and notifying others that they had moved
in, it is a great chance to meet each other for the first time. This custom
takes place when one moves to a new place, which is very common in countries
all around the world. Since it is very general and common culture but also
brings many advantages, it will be very easy to be adopted.
Sharing
rice cakes can be very beneficial in many ways. People will be able to feel
more comfortable towards their neighbors, and it can also be shown in a way of
expressing politeness and respect towards each other. Also, since siru rice cake
has a special meaning. In Korea, it means to let go of all bad luck. Adopting
this custom will make people get nearer, and it will also be easily adopted in
each country’s culture. People should go out and start to know their neighbors,
just in a way our custom does.
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I really like the example you gave, which is about the upper floor; I think it has a strong point!
답글삭제oh and I can't see the "My Goals" post.. write it before Mr.Menard checks zzzzz
Hi, I'm Hun Kang from v2.
답글삭제I think your overall essay is well-organized and interesting to read:) Especially, I like the example you gave in the first topic paragraph. Also, the second topic paragraph is very fresh to me. I've never thought of it!
Anyway, it was very pleasant for me to comment about your essay.
What I like the most about this essay is organization.
답글삭제The points are clear and each paragraph has respective sentences that represent the main idea.
I Also like how you started with a friendly topic and how you make the reader want to try the rice cake so much.
Great Essay Great job